Some say that news has no connection with most people’s life and it is waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

The world is struggling with dilemmas to keep things away from them or have close look
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the
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society. Some
people
think that
media
outlets are worthless and they should stop reading news from social
media
as well as print
media
. I completely disagree with the statement due to the fact that
people
will remain uninformed politically & socially . union policies and schemes will face difficulty and many social welfare schemes will be delayed.
Firstly
,
People
will find them isolated from the rest of the world despite
such
high-speed internet services if they choose to restrain from
media
houses. The consequences would be unimaginable which is evident in
people
and in
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they will lose their right to information that can lead to
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corrupted or authoritarian regime.
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in Russia
people
take little or no interest in news articles even though the country is rich and provide 5G internet to the public.
Therefore
, it will be a
truely
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truly
unfair practice and it should be endorsed because it provides checks and balances in politics and
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.
Secondly
, the welfare schemes will suffer a lot which is a setback for
people
's health care benefits programs launched by the
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ministry.The new technology is going to be challenging for
people
who live in backward areas and
there
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voice will remain unheard even though they live in a democratic country
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For instance
Indian union announced demonetisation in the evening but
people
has no clue what the state
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trying to do. So newspaper and
media
play a mediator between state and public which ultimately benefit both. to summarise,
people
should be informed about political
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and society which is going to be beneficial. public services can only reach out to beneficiaries to avail benefits of authority-funded programs. the
media
will play
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role in society even in the coming years.
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