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the alteration of a beachfront area in Australian in 1950 and today.

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The given maps illustrate the alteration of a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today. Overall. There was a noticeable change after the construction takes place and the different changes can be seen in the addition of extra facilities. In 1950, the beachfront was located towards the north of the beach. On each side of the beach, towards the northeast and the northwest were 25 meters swimming pools, while there was a lighthouse situated on the southeast of the beach. The car park was there towards the northeast, connected to the road running from the west, in front of which playground, four dining tables and pavilion were there. Presently, the place experienced a significant change. The road to the north has been extended towards the southeast. The new car park is there in place of the playground, whereas the original car park remains unchanged.
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, the four dining tables and pavilion remained as they are. Two surf clubs have been made, near each swimming pool. The swimming pool on the west grew in size to 50 meters.the restaurant has been made on the southwest and the lighthouse remain unaffected.
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