Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the number of food and drink
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consist of high levels of sweetness from
sugar
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lead to
people
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have unhealthy in their
health
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.
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products
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that contain
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sugar
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should be
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at a
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high
price
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to encourage
people
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to consume less
sugar
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. In my point of view, I disagree with
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solution since there are many kinds of food or drink
consist
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consisting
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of
sugar
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so there should not have a high
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.
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contrary
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, they should begin with personal
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to consume less
sugar
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. The reason to support my opinion will be discussed in the following paragraphs. In daily life,
many
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any
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kind
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kinds
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of food and drink
have
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sugar
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as the main ingredient. For
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reason,
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should not have a high
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in the market.
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contrary
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, the problems of
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from consuming so much
sugar
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can solve by personal
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and the
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.
To begin
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with, the personal
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,
people
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should be select the manus that there is low
sugar
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for your
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.
Secondly
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, consumers might try to find sweetness from natural
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such
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as the
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from coconut and honey.
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, the
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should be lunch a
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policy that educates
people
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about the drawbacks of consuming
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at a high level.
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, there is a problem of high blood
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, a cause of obesity, bones and tooth are weak and the main factor of acne problem.
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, the
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should be support
sugar
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which makes from
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apply
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natural
products
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such
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as
sugar
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from coconut and honey.  To summarise,
sugar
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should not be more expensive in the market to encourage
people
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to consume less
sugar
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for their
health
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.
In
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contrary
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, acknowledge
people
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to
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consume
sugar
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from natural
products
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and they should control themselves to consume low
sugar
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.
Furthermore
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, the
government
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should be lunch a
health
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policy to support
people
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to consume
sugar
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from coconut and honey. In my opinion,
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is more important than adapting the
price
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of
sugar
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to be high in the market. It is clear that I can be solved by personal
behaviour
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and the
government
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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