Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the number of food and drink
products
consist of high levels of sweetness from
sugar
lead to
people
have unhealthy in their
health
.
Thus
products
that contain
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sugar
should be
a
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high
price
to encourage
people
to consume less
sugar
. In my point of view, I disagree with
this
solution since there are many kinds of food or drink
consist
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of
sugar
so there should not have a high
price
.
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contrary
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, they should begin with personal
behaviour
to consume less
sugar
. The reason to support my opinion will be discussed in the following paragraphs. In daily life,
many
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kind
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of food and drink
have
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sugar
as the main ingredient. For
this
reason,
sugar
should not have a high
price
in the market.
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contrary
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, the problems of
health
from consuming so much
sugar
can solve by personal
behaviour
and the
government
.
To begin
with, the personal
behaviour
,
people
should be select the manus that there is low
sugar
for your
health
.
Secondly
, consumers might try to find sweetness from natural
products
such
as the
sugar
from coconut and honey.
In addition
, the
government
should be lunch a
health
policy that educates
people
about the drawbacks of consuming
sugar
at a high level.
For example
, there is a problem of high blood
sugar
, a cause of obesity, bones and tooth are weak and the main factor of acne problem.
Moreover
, the
government
should be support
sugar
which makes from
the
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natural
products
such
as
sugar
from coconut and honey.  To summarise,
sugar
should not be more expensive in the market to encourage
people
to consume less
sugar
for their
health
.
In
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contrary
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, acknowledge
people
to
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consume
sugar
from natural
products
and they should control themselves to consume low
sugar
.
Furthermore
, the
government
should be lunch a
health
policy to support
people
to consume
sugar
from coconut and honey. In my opinion,
this
is more important than adapting the
price
of
sugar
to be high in the market. It is clear that I can be solved by personal
behaviour
and the
government
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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