Some educationalists say a child should be taught to play a musical instrument. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays playing
musical
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a musical
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instrument is developing day by day.
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going to school more and more
parents
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give their
children
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to play musical instruments like a piano,guitar,violin and etc. On one hand,it is
useful
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a useful
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and interesting
emloyment
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employment
for
children
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. Because I think
children
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should be occupied with something so that they do not commit a crime or do something foolery.
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,playing musical instruments
children
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change their world outlook,enrich
own
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their own
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knowledge. Especially, it has benefits for
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. Because
,
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parents
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so
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do
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not worry about their
children
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while they are in
a
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profitable activity. On
other
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the other
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hand,
children
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should
that
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do that
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activity or subject
which
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in which
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they are interested
.
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in.
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Not every
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children
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child
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are fond of playing musical
instrumets
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instruments
. In conclusion, I think
parents
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must know what their
children
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like or do not like.
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