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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

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It is always argued that in some countries
people
 prefer to buy a
house
instead
 of renting it. In fact, in my point of view,
this
 occasion is a negative situation between
people
 of a society.
To begin
 with, in today's modern world,
still
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 there are lots of
people
 who think it is important to own a
house
 rather than renting one. Because they believe it is really important for their future
life
 and peace to own a
house
 without monthly payment. So they plan their entire
life
 for saving
money
 or borrowing
money
 from other
people
 or banks to buy a
house
 while sometimes they waste their time and energy for no reason.
For example
, in my own country, Iran,
people
 are so competitive in
this
 situation. They spent all their
money
 on buying a
house
 whereas they can spend it in other different areas which can make them more pleasure in their
life
. Like travelling and exploring all over the world.
Although
,
this
 situation turned out to be a trend in some societies.
In other words
, if someone buys a
house
, he or she is a rich person and almost guaranteed their future
life
.
As a result
,
people
 who can not buy a
house
 or spend their
money
 on other situations are always blamed by society. If I want to make an example, again in my country, one of the important signs of being rich is owning a
house
. In spite of that renting a
house
 means you are poor. In summary, almost in every country, there are some
people
 who thought owning or renting a
house
 is a really important point in their
life
. While it is never guaranteed or improves their
life
's quality.
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