Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The ultimate capacity of the mind has been an enigma since the primordial existence of man. In light of
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is limitless, it can be harnessed at will through different faculties of learning. Mental endowment is one of the facets
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the genetic makeup of a person. The intrinsic inclination of a child to a specific type of intelligence echoes the virtuosity his ancestors had,
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becomes the prototype of his utmost potential. The artistic flair I inherited from my mother provided me with the useful tools to excel scholastically and develop a passion for writing. Indeed, in a
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world people are living in today, possessing a high IQ is wearing a badge of godly status that makes anyone stand out in any
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On the other hand
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matter acts like a sponge capable of absorbing anything by constantly forming neural associations when acquiring new bits of information. Neuroscience
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yet to grasp the truest power of knowledge, from mental aptitude to quantum physics. A study in psychology proved that upon discovering how to enter
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state, the realm of peak performance, anyone can awaken his dormant, genius self.
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gaining momentum in the learning curve of an individual.
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both hereditary and environmental factors are crucial in shaping a human's brainpower, it would not be
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rocket science to join the
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of Einstein if one wishes to. One simply has to masterfully tinker
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cognitive hardware and match it with perseverance and sheer determination to succeed in life. Essentially, freeing the mind from the shackles of doubt sets it forth
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a trajectory of brilliance.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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