The environmental problems facing today’s world are so significant that few ordinary people can improve this situation. The government and large companies should reduce the amount of damage to the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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relief of not being late. The sharp needle on the clock stood by the number 8 and
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surface reflected the winter sunlight. A huge wave of excitement washed over me and my heart jumped faster because of my uncontrollable nervosity. I took a deep breath and entered the classroom for the
first
time. The excited chatting of the
students
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of the birds. Some of the
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inside the class was almost deafening. My head ached from the sound and I closed my eyes tightly to shove the vociferous echo out of my head. I did not know the reason for their excitement but at
this
very minute, I felt like I could scream as well, so strong was my thought of being new and I controlled my voice with
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strength I had. Right
next
to the door, there were already some
students
sitting at their places. Some of them leaned back lazily to their desks and were enjoying their time with friends before the lessons started.
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back, nearer the windows, groups of brightly dressed teenager girls were whispering promising things to each other and their hands danced in the air as they laughed. Some of them had already noticed me and were now throwing questioning glances at me
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while studying my face with intensity. I felt
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down my spinal
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as I felt uninvited and like an intruder. Behind me, I heard the continuing sound of heels tapping the floor. I turned around my head and saw the teacher coming into the class. She was a woman in her mid-thirties and she had a serious expression on her face. The sudden silence confused me as other
students
had stopped talking within a minute and their tongue was glued to their lips, unable to produce sound anymore. Not sure what to do, I remained
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and the teacher came toward me with a surprising smile on her face. “Good morning,” said she. She kept her voice down but I could understand each word clear and sharp like new-cut glasses. “You must be the new student, welcome to our c
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