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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so is not necessary to travel anymore? Do you agree?

#people #internet #lives #cultures #countries #travel
Nowadays, the
internet
 is very useful for everybody. It helps a lot with the communication with other people, regardless of where the person is ,
in addition
, we can use the
internet
 as a search
palce
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place
space
 and
also
 learn about the other country's culture. But I completely disagree with
this
 opinion because I think that human interaction is important in knowing people and its surrounding.
First
 of all, travelling creates meaningful memories, travelling, getting to know new places, meeting the culture of
other country
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, getting to know more about new people. It's a completely amazing experience, obviously knowing as new place interacting won't be the same as over the
internet
. It would be two completely
differentl
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different
 things.
Second
, meeting a new place
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 give more personal knowledge and understanding . It makes memories and new experiences. In
addtion
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addition
, it
also
 helps shape someone's personality and perspective in life, plus, not everything from the
internet
 is true. In conclusion, I believe that
traveling
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 is much better than
seein
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seeing
 everything over the
internet
, interaction is very
importnat
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important
 , and new adventures will always be good for someone's development.
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