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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creative than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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It is said by some people that some
children
 who play interesting
games
 can improve their skills and
this
 is much better than studying. Personally, I totally agree with
this
 notion because by doing interesting exercises with
children
, parents can make them enhance their potential and it is much more fun. There are some reasons why parents prefer enjoyable activities to others. One of them is that it may improve young generations' cognitive skills.
That is
,
while
 playing different enjoyable
games
, they are highly active and blood circle well in the body.
As a result
,
this
 can deliver adequate blood to the young's brain, which may develop their mental ability.
For example
,
according to
 the findings of a recent survey conducted by the US government,
children
 who played
games
 more improved their critical thinking than those who did not. The second important one is that
this
 can encourage offspring to be active and work in collaboration with nature. In
this
 case, they wholly feel the environment and learn a lot of things from it.
As a consequence
, they play in nature, which is more beneficial than reading books as by reading books, they can only gain theoretical knowledge about one subject.
However
, playing different
games
 can link several subjects. In conclusion,
children
 who do activities more than others who do not are more active and conscious.
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