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Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
mordern
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modern
order
 day, a lot of companies has introduced a new creative solution for their
workspace
, the open-
space
 designs, as
oppossed
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opposed
 to the normal cube-block design.
This
 essay will demonstrate how
this
 wave of change in
work
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the work
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 environment has transformed the employee’s experience in an effective way, but will
also
 show that
this
 new
space
 design could lead to distraction during
work
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the work
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 period. While
acknowledge
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acknowledging
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 that there are drawbacks, the essay will argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. One of the main
benefit
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benefits
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 of
open-concept
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an open-concept
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workspace
 is that it provides an effective alternative to the usual boring separate-
work
 rooms. The open
space
 acts as a lounge for the employees and
help
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 bring people in the office closer together, which encourage
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teamwork
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team
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teamwork
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work
 and human connection. Google is a big
cooporations
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corporations
corporation
 that have
succesfully
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successfully
experiemented
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experimented
 with
this
 type of design, people over there have a working environment full of interesting objects. There are ping pong tables and arcade games, the
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furniture
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
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 that people used come in different colours and shapes. Someone could
work
 with his computer outside in nature or he could
work
 sitting on a hammock or a pod. All of these things are
usefull
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useful
 in helping the employee relax and promote creativity, it is working but it is
also
 like being back to
the
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childhood, essentially.
However
, the open-concept
work
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workspace
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space
 does come with a
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downside
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down side
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downside
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,
that is
, it might not
work
 well for companies that have a low morale workforce. Employees that are not well selected or not well-managed could hardly rip the full benefits of the open-
space
 concept. In
orther
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other
 words, there needs to be a clear productive goal that everyone must meet
ortherwise
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otherwise
 even the most creative
workspace
 wouldn’t
able
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 to save them from
destraction
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destruction
distraction
.
Last
 year, one
finacial
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financial
 firm in my town did an
experiementation
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experimentation
 with
open-concept
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an open-concept
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workspace
 and it was reported that the productivity fell with
this
 model, it was hard for the workers to focus
at
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on
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 their duties when they don’t have their own private
space
. In conclusion,
although
 the new wage of open-
space
work
 concept doesn’t guarantee effectiveness and productivity with every company, it does
however
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,
bringing
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 new ideas and broaden the
deffinition
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definition
 of
mordern
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modern
workspace
. Employees with
balance
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the balance
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 between
work
 and play would experience
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positive
possitive
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 vibe and that could help spark new
inovative
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innovative
,
espeically
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especially
 when they
in
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are in
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 a team
environement
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environment
.
Hence
, the advantages of open workspaces
deffinitely
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definitely
 outweigh the disadvantages.
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