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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some individuals believe that we need to learn to live with
climate
change
 rather than prevent it. I strongly disagree with
this
 idea, and I believe that, that the prevention of
climate
change
 is the possible solution for humankind. On the one hand,
Climate
change
such
 as global warming is a serious problem for the world. It was affected by the massive consumption of
energy
 especially that categorized non-renewable
energy
.
This
 trend would decrease the degree of the environment. For an instance, the user of fossil fuel and air conditioners produced CO2 and CO that would contaminate the air and
as a result
, it tends to increase the worlds’ temperature. One of the best strategies is that shifting from fossil fuels to renewable
energy
such
 as wind, solar and sea wave would help in preventing
climate
change
.
Therefore
, the realistic solution for
this
 issue is that individuals should use an environmentally friendly source of
energy
.
On the other hand
, in an extreme situation, the effect of
climate
change
 would harm the living being. It has been predicted that
climate
change
 would be dangerous for humankind as well as wildlife. As an example, due to the increasing of worlds temperature, it has been predicted that all glaciers should be melted by 2040 as well as followed by the increasing sea level.
Therefore
, some land would be submerged as the effect of the addition of seawater volume. In
this
 situation, not only humans but
also
 other living beings would be suffered. To summarize, the only rational solution to solve the possible impact of
climate
change
 is that every individual start to take some actions in order to prevent
climate
change
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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