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Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Some people believe that progress is achieved by taking
risks
 and chances.
While
 others believe that
success
 comes from better and
careful
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 planning. From my own experiences and observations, I believe that better results come from careful planning. In
this
 essay, I will give my reasons to support my answer. First of all, I believe that careful planning helps a person to analyse his goal more deeply and make realistic
goals
. With a well-planned approach, he knows exactly what he wants. It not only gives them a clear path towards
success
 but
also
 helps them in their
decision making
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. Taking chances,
on the other hand
, does not give the opportunity to clearly understand a goal. A person just wants to do something to move forward and he takes
risks
 when there is no need for it.
Secondly
, careful planning teaches people time management which assists them to reach their
goals
 with fewer
risks
. They become more patient and calm. They plan every step very well.
This
 allows folk to find easier ways to reach their
goals
 and faster move forward.
On the other hand
, those who prefer to take opportunities without planning may spend more time and money as well without any improvements waiting for a chance to take.
For instance
, a famous wrestler Bajrang Punia earned his fortune by following the rules that he established for himself.
Therefore
, only planning and hard work can bring out
success
.
Finally
, careful planning teaches them not to give up and try to find other ways to reach their
goals
 in the case of failure.
To sum up
, I personally think that all those who succeed in life would agree with me that their
success
came
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 with hard work and careful planning rather than just taking high
risks
 alone.
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