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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Generally, talent and
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 play an important role in success.
On the other hand
, there are lots of
sucessful
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successful
 champions or artists who performed surprisingly,
whithout
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without
 any particular talent. In my opinion, different parameters can be significantly effective in
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 nature and nurture are both crucial. The importance of talent in success is undeniable.
For example
, African runners are being champions of
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 cup and Olympic games for decades.
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 repeated result caused American physiologists to conduct
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research on the reason
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. Results surprisingly illustrated that their body structure and form of
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muscles
 is completely different from people's of other continents, which gives them a considerable more chance to become fast runners. Similar examples in
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area
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 of arts,
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science
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 or sports are common. A child who can drow meaningful paints without any special training is another typical example in
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 regard, which is tangible for most
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the
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people. All
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 reasons and examples cannot weak the importance of training. In fact,
human
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 child is able to learn every
skills
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 sooner or later, in case of being interested.
In other words
, when we are not
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genetically
 talented
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 that art or skill, more effort is needed to learn and provide acceptable results or performance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate abilities
  • genetic make-up
  • inherent aptitude
  • nurturing environment
  • rigorous training
  • proficient
  • initial advantage
  • consistent practice
  • perseverance
  • quality training
  • prodigies
  • dedication
  • long-term success
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