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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Human beings have been evolving for a long period of
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that
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 they come up with many ways to communicate with each other;
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, they established their own method to socialize with their peers. There is debate among individuals that people should learn a new
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 if they have the intention of working abroad, whereas others
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 believe that there are reasons that surpassed that
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perspective
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 argument, and why I believe that learning a new
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 has many advantages. On one hand, there is a group that has the notion that an individual should spend their
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 wisely, and to do so is by linking
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 and capital gain.
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 with, they believe that
someone
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 can spend their
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to learn
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 a new
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,
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 if that person already
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 received a job offer from a country that has a different
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.
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, that allocation of
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 should be exchanged with something that could benefit that person.
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, there is a consensus that believes that learning a new
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 could be beneficial.
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, many
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neuroscientists
 believe that learning a new
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 would create
a new paths
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 in
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someone
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 mind.
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, these paths might enhance their memory and cognition.
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 is because the process of obtaining a new
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 means that
someone
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 will use all of their senses. In conclusion, it is often thought that the primary reason for an individual to learn a new
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 is to work abroad, while there are others, that disagree with
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 statement. I believe that both sides have merits. On balance,
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, it is my opinion that allocating
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time
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 to gain a new
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 might impact their
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 positively.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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