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It is becoming increasingly popular for people to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Do the advantages of having a gap year outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
this
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 present world, the popularity of
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 having a
gap
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year
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 between graduating from school and starting for
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university had increased gradually. From my point of view,
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having a
gap
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year
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 seems to be a waste of
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, they offer an opportunity for
students
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 to find themselves and be able to learn in a correct
career
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path
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 in the university. On the one hand, one of the
advantage
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 of
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 having a
gap
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year
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 is that they have
time
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 to search for jobs they would like to do. As we all know, working life takes more than half of our lifetime. Some of the
students
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 use
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gap
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year
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 opportunity to search for their jobs that they have a passion
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 by doing
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work
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 placement or taking a short course. I truly believe that if we are able to
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 on what we enjoy
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, we will be able to
work
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 more efficiently than others who did not have a passion
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which result
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 more opportunity to grow on that
career
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path
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.
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, there are some disadvantages of having a
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year
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which
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one of
that is
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 the waste of
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. Some people have done the
work
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 placement and
still
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 not sure of the
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 they will be choosing and
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 up
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learning on a course that they might not like.
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, it might make the
students
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to
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miss some of the opportunities on their
career
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path
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.
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, in the covid pandemic situation, jobs are very hard to find. If the
students
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 did not have a
year
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 off they might already have a job as a
year
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 earlier the world situation is still normal as usual. To summarize, it is true to say that
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having a
year
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 off will help
students
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 to find a
career
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 that they really want to
work
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 on.
However
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, it might be a waste of
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 if that person did not find what
career
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 that they really want to
work
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 for the rest of their life.
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