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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, there are some
countries
 with a large
number
 of young adults, compared with the
number
 of older
people
. They have advantages and disadvantages for
this
 situation,
however
, I believe the benefits outweigh the disadvantages for three reasons.
First
 of all, these
countries
 might be increase their incomes with the young
generation
. Compared to the elderly
generation
, the young
generation
 is good at coming up with new ideas.
Therefore
, they can start new businesses more and expand them with several perspectives. With
this
 condition, these
countries
 can earn a large
number
 of money by new ideas by young
people
.
Secondly
, these
countries
 can reduce the
cost
 of illness and it improves their financial situation of them.
For instance
, the Japanese government paid 45 per cent of all tax income for
cost
 medicine in 2021, especially the 80 per cent of the
cost
 was used for
people
 aged more than 60 years old. If the
number
 of older
people
 is low, the government can reduce the medicine
cost
 gradually.
Finally
, these
countries
 might improve the level of
people
's satisfaction. According to National research issued by Spain, an investigation showed that the country with a large
number
 of the younger
generation
 had a high result of
people
's satisfaction. The research said that young
people
 tend to satisfy with their life easier by having their dreams for the future, on the other ,hand it is difficult to satisfy with their life for older
people
 because they have a lot of concern for their future. There is a huge argument for
this
 situation,
nevertheless
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 I believe the advantages of the condition outweigh the disadvantages by three reasons. By increasing the country's income by new ideas, reducing the
cost
 for illness, and improving citizen satisfaction.
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