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Watching TV has a lot of benefits. Do you agree or disagree this view.

#tv
Nowadays,
people
 watch television as a form of leisure. Some
people
 believe that it has some advantages while others say
otherwise
. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages of watching
tv
outweighs
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 the disadvantages. I will discuss my views in
this
 essay. On the one hand, some individuals argue that spending time watching television has lots of benefits as it helps
people
 relax after long hours of the day's work.
For example
, watching movies or listening to music can be calming and soothing. It helps in relieving stress. Another benefit is that watching
news
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 on the screen helps
people
 to be aware of what is happening both in their surroundings and outside, it provides them with worldwide information on politics, crime, entertainment, to name a few.
On the other hand
, opposers argue that viewing
tv
 does not have any merits as it is just another way of wasting quality time that should be used in carrying out other important duties. They will rather spend their free time doing other leisure activities
such
 as solving puzzles, playing games like chess, scrabble. They believe that these other activities keep the brain busy. Another disadvantage is that watching
Tv
 might expose individuals
especially
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 children if not supervised to crime and nudity.
For instance
, some channels show these appalling scenes and somehow children tend to want to copy what they see. For
the
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this
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 reason, some parents do not allow their kids to watch television at all. I am of the opinion that there are both merits and demerits of watching
tv
 but with proper guidance, the negative effects will be curtailed because in recent times almost everything can be learned on the screen.
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