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The life cycle of honey bee has made us understand its existence. How are honey bee formed?

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The given diagram illustrates the different phases of metamorphosis the honey bee undergoes starting from eggs
then
 to the stage of maturity. Overall, it can be seen that the life cycle of these bees has four major stages, these include; larvae phase,
Nymph
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the Nymph
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 moult,
young
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the young
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 adults and
lastly
, maturation
as
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the adults
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adults
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. These cyclical changes take an average total of about 34 to 36
days
 for a honey bee to attain full maturity.
To begin
 with, the mature female bee lays 1 or 2 eggs in the honeycomb every three
days
, these eggs hatch to form larvae after a period of nine to ten
days
 and begin to grow. By the ninth day, the larvae
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 nymph moults which grow to about 3 times more than their initial size and the young adult emerges. After 4
days
 of maturity, the young adults become adult bees which are capable of reproduction and the cycle continues.
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