You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently read an

article

in your international travel magazine and I was very delighted when I came to know that the

information

related to my town, Amritsar, was given in that

article

. I am writing to inform you that one piece of

information

was incorrect and I am hoping that you will take immediate consideration to correct that

information

. In the

article

, there was a brief note on Jallian Wala Bagh in Amritsar. It was written that it is related to Sikhism.

However

, it has no relation with any religion and is a historical place related to our nation's great freedom fighters. I believe that

this

is important to give correct

information

as your magazine is very popular among tourists and

this

information

will mislead them.

Moreover

, it will be injustice to the great freedom fighters as well. As a solution, I suggest you kindly republish the same

article

with the correct

information

and adding some images of Jallian Wala Bagh will help the readers to remember its historical importance. Hoping for your kind consideration in

this

regard. Yours faithfully, Rohan Mishra

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

188 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine.

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