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In some countries, some criminal trials are shown on the television andthe general public can watch them, do you think the advantages of thisoutweigh the disadvantages?

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In many nations, criminal
trials
 are being broadcasted through television networks for the public to watch. There are pros and cons to
this
 action, and in
this
 essay, I will discuss the advantages that are superior to the disadvantages. Nowadays, we see many television broadcasting the
trials
, whether or not are criminal
trials
. When a criminal trial is been shown, it will give a message to the public that criminals will be known by the public; as
such
this
 will teach the youngsters to have
second
 thoughts before committing a crime.
Furthermore
, as a criminal is on trial, knowing is being broadcast nationwide; the criminal will mentally be ashamed of what he has done. Eventually,
this
 is another way of lowering the atrocity rate.
However
, all these strategies are seen as very promising by lowering the atrocity rate; but
this
also
 will increase the number of misinterpretations of the broadcasting. In the democratic society today, whatever the TV is showing, it will be judged by different comments.
For instance
, police brutality has been an issue throughout the US. Many citizens think that policemen should be more human when confronting the criminal, and others think not.
Therefore
 when a policeman is on trial in
this
 matter, society will not give accurate justice. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of broadcasting criminal
trials
 outweigh the disadvantage. It will lower the crime rates, as well as show the youngsters what will happen if committed a crime.
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