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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home. Give your opinion.

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Some professors say a kid should be taught to play
a
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musical implements.
Im
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In
 my opinion it is not
a
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 right way to teach kids to play
a musical instruments
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a musical instrument
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. The reason for it, most children may not like to play
musical
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 tools. On the one hand, the good side of it some kids like playing different musical instruments and like singing.
Although
, they can learn to play musical tools without difficulties and
moreover
 they can remember various subjects easy. If children learn to play musical instruments they go in for
different
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competition
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 and
as a
result
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 they have to go
various
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 countries. Once
this
 has finished they have to learn
different
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 language.
Then
 they must be taught all of these things.
On the other hand
, the downside of
this
 idea some kids do not like playing a musical instrument. They like learning other things
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 example, foreign languages, economics, exact subjects. In
conclusion
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 children
who
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need to be taught what they like.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • Home office
  • Flexible schedule
  • Productivity
  • Cost-effective
  • Isolation
  • Burnout
  • Work-life balance
  • Technical disruptions
  • Commuting
  • Distractions
  • Connectivity
  • Collaboration
  • Autonomy
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