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Some people believe that children are given too much free time.They feel that this time should be used to do more school time. How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The
school
 going students spend around 6 hours daily at schools across several nations. Few parents are of the opinion that these hours should be increased since teenagers have more than enough free
time
 at home. The essay illustrates the benefits of augmenting the
school
time
 and
also
, other productive ways to spend their extra
time
.
To begin
 with, every student has a fixed routine of
school
-going.
Thus
, increasing the
time
 in
school
 would not have any drastic effect on children's lifestyles. In fact, schools could focus on an individual's talent or passion, and provide the appropriate path where each one could excel.
For instance
, if an adolescent is interested in computer applications and games,
then
 relevant knowledge could be transferred that would result in greater understanding.
Secondly
, spending more
time
 in
school
 will have positive ramifications like children would be able to complete their syllabuses swiftly.
On the other hand
, young boys and girls could spend their leisure
time
 in personal growth rather than being dependent on schools. The teens could spend more
time
 with their friends and family which would result in greater attachment, and
hence
 less stress.
Moreover
, according to
a
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research by the students of the University of Exeter, the children who are habitual of reading books or novels are more intellectual than others.
Thus
, the younger generation should read more books in their non-study
time
. To conclude, it is equally important to spend one's leisure
time
 in growing one's knowledge, as well as
personal
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 attachment with the family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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