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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
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The changes in
the
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road
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 access to a city hospital between the year 2007 and 2010
was
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 shown in the map.
Overall
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, the three notable changes that can be observed are
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bus
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a bus
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 station, two roundabouts, and a separate
car
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 parking for the public. In 2007, the hospital, which was located inside the Ring
Road
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 circle had only one access to the City
road
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, which is via Hospital
Road
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 at the south.
This
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 straight
road
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 has either six
bus
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 stops on both sides and towards its East; a
car
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 park for staff and the public. The most notable
changes
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 in 2010
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 the development
in
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transportation
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the transportation
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 system, wherein the six
bus
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 stops before
has
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 transformed
in to
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 a large
bus
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 station towards the west of
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Hospital
Road
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. There are
also
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 two roundabouts now, one at the intersection of Ring
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 and Hospital
Road
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, and the other at the intersection of Hospital
Road
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 and City
Road
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.
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, the
car
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 park on the east side of Hospital
road
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 was made exclusively for staff and a public
car
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 park was set up
at
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 the east side of the hospital.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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