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Some people claim that too much focus and resources have been spent to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the increasing number of preservation for wildlife, especially those for
animals
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 and birds, some
people
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 claim that the emphasis and spent are too much.
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, others, including me, believe that these expenditures are necessary and inevitable. On the one hand, some
people
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 may argue that
animals
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 do not need any extra protection. while it is considered that the extinction of
animals
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 as part of the natural cycles, many different species have disappeared, and new stains have emerged naturally.
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, concentrating on
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 matter should be restricted. Apart from that, these resources can spend on other vital sections
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 as the economy and health.
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, governments in developing countries where
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 do not have access to good hygiene, water, and food, should not focus mainly on preserving
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.
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, saving
animals
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 has its importance, and it should prioritize.
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, many
people
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 might see the preservation of
animals
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 as a necessity. Today, humans intervene and manipulate nature exceedingly more than ever. Many
animals
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 are vanished or lost their habitats.
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, it becomes a responsibility to save all kinds of
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.
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, all breeds play their role in nature, and any extinction will bring environmental changes that may lead to an irreversible catastrophe.
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, squirrels play an important part in breeding trees by hiding the seeds underground. So personally, I think the amount of focus and resources is not too much, and indeed, it should be done perfectly. In conclusion,
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 it appears that massive resources and time are spent saving
animals
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 and birds, these approaches are crucial and needed to protect the environment.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wildlife conservation
  • ecosystem preservation
  • sustainable development
  • biodiversity
  • habitat destruction
  • ecological balance
  • ethical responsibility
  • economic benefits
  • endangered species
  • poaching
  • education and awareness
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