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the alteration of the grange park between 1920 and the present.

The given maps illustrate the alteration of the grange
park
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 between 1920 and the present. Overall, there are noticeable changes after the construction take place and the significant changes can be seen in the addition of the extra facilities. In 1920, there were two main entrances,
one
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 towards the north and another
one
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 on the south, which there was a glasshouse on the right side. The fountain was there in the centre of the
park
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, towards the left of which was a stage for musicians. On three sides of the
park
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, towards the northeast and northwest were the rose garden, while another
one
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 was located on the southwest. On a corner towards the northeast, the pond was there and there were five seats scattered in the
park
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 Presently, the enormous changes can be seen, the fountain in the centre is converted into a large rose garden, surrounded by the relocated four seats. The stage is turned into a huge amphitheatre. While the rose garden towards the northwest is placed by a cafe, and that on the northwest remains in its place. The glasshouse is removed and in place of its,the water feature is placed.
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, whereas the two original entrance remains unaffected, the new
one
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 is built on the southeast corner.

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