IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative developments?

#weddings #reason #developments
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The togetherness and bonding of two people, on the verge of spirituality keeping it lifelong with the consent of both, leads to a successful marriage. Whilst, the trend behind
this
Linking Words
 function, nowadays, is perplexed, whether, is it the wedding or showing off jewellery and dowry indeed? Hereby, speaking for myself, I believe it's an utterly negative development, which is because of the miscellaneous reason as stated below. People these days are sophisticated with many things including the living standard, clothing, food and many more which they want to create a superior position in the society they are dwelling, be it a wedding ceremony or just a simple occasion. They are more into creating memories by purchasing expensive accessories like jewellery, designer's dresses making it extra for the wedding looks highly paid photographers which ultimately make the function cost an arm and a leg, just to establish their high reputation and standard in the society.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, celebrities are spending massive money for marriage so as to be at the heading of the news, irrespective of the consequences what community might think of, or just for getting the attention of all, they make it costly so that they can flaunt in social media and get highlighted. Both of which may result in an economic crisis as money is spent haphazardly without the proper use if the public copies celebrity trends.
Besides
Linking Words
, antisocial activities
such
Linking Words
 as robbery and burglary might happen when those thieves know about big events that are happening.
Thus
Linking Words
, it is to conclude that the excess use of cash in the marriage function and other occasions for the sake of publicity leads to degrading of the culture and increase the antisocial activities which are definitely downfalls.
Submitted by sht.teclab on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: