A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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A debate towards social status and old-fashioned

values

is breaking the internet lately. Many

people

believe, having a great social status and material is more important than honour, kindness, and

trust

. I strongly disagree with

this

view and I’m going to write down the explanation. Since we were a kid, we were told by our parents not to judge a book by its cover but in the reality, we are judging a book by its cover. Nowadays,

people

are willing to pay a great number of money for a nice and fancy suit. Not only they are hoping to be respected, but

also

to gain

trust

easily.

People

tend to

trust

a well-fashioned guy to do a business than a bad appearance person.

However

, I believe that old-fashioned

values

are

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also

matter in life.

Wise

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man once said, “treat

people

the way you want to be treated”. If you want to be honoured,

then

you should start by honouring other

people

. I

also

have

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faith that by doing

this

, we can gain

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“real”

trust

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others rather than just simply put on good clothes to gain

trust

. In summary, both materials and old-fashioned

values

are important in humanity. I

also

consider that old-fashioned

values

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much more valuable rather putting on

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pretty materials.

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material possessions
old-fashioned values
honour
kindness
trust
empathy
media influence
self-worth
metrics of success
financial achievements
community contributions
superficial connections
emotional bonds
life satisfaction
stress and anxiety
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restoring balance
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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

In many parts of the world, there is not enough food for everyone. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is traffic on roads. Traffic on roads has become a problem in the world. It is undeniable that cars has become an essential part of our life

In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

The picture shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Most countries want to improve standard of living through economic development, however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?