A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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important
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people
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strongly disagree with the view, because it will
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people
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don't
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begin
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people
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their social
status
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value
such
as trust, honour, and kindness. sooner or later,
this
bad view will get rid of good
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the people
that have
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will be extinct. ironically,
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bad view will make a bad hustle
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culture
that will make many
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prefer
to reach money more than increase value in
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their self
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person. many
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