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Some people tell that to reduce traffic and pollution, government should increase the tax on the petrol (gasoline). Would there is more benefits than the drawback?

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There is an opinion among certain individuals that applying an increased
tax
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 on
petrol
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 by the
government
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 will act as a deterrent to road traffic and pollution. Throughout
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 essay, I will discuss the benefits and demerits of
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 a measure and provide my viewpoint.
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, there is no doubt that gasoline is a major cause of vehicular congestion on roads and environmental pollution. Increasing the
tax
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petrol
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 will not only prevent
people
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 from taking out their personal vehicles
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 but will
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 promote sustainable alternatives
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 as carpooling,cycling use of public
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 etc.
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, there will be a decline in the release of harmful pollutants in the atmosphere, which is one of the major causes of global warming.
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, due to the high taxation of
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, most
people
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 in Denmark commute by bicycle and the
government
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 has implemented dedicated lanes for the same.
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,
people
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 will embrace electrical vehicles, which is environmentally friendly and cheaper as compared to
transport
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 run on fuel. At the same time, Increased taxes on
petrol
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 will not be taken kindly by individuals as it will create a dent in their pockets. Unless the
government
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 invests in an alternate source of
transport
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 infrastructure, solely increasing the
tax
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 bracket on gasoline will not have the desired results. In the absence of , another mode of
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people
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 will continue to use cars.
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, the electric vehicle sector in India lacks
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 funding and policies for development, even though
people
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 are ready to use electric cars and bikes. To conclude, the benefits of increasing the
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 on
petrol
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 can far outweigh the drawbacks if the
government
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 takes proper measures in developing other modes of transportation and not just increase the
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 bracket for its personal benefits.
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