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Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative developments?

#weddings #reason #developments
marriage celebration is the most uneconomical festival in the world nowadays.A lot of
people
 spent a lot of
money
for
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 their big day and in my opinion, the difference between the advantages and disadvantages are the same and the world's richest
people
 can do whatever they want because they have enough
money
 to spend. On the one hand, every girl who lives in
this
 plant needs to make that day unforgettable. So they do a plethora of things to make that happen. They spent a vast range of
money
 on that and they waste a huge period of time
for
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planning
this
 event.
For example
,
last
 year, one of my friends got
marriage
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 and that was a grand function for all participants,
Also
 he spends a huge amount of
money
 and time
for
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 that. As far as
i
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 concern it is positive development the
people
 who can expand as much as
money
 for him or her without a doubt.
On the other hand
, Some
people
 Do not have sufficient expenses for their big day but they do not know how to find that
money
.
Although
 they do not have any way to find that
money
 and they turn for lones for their weddings. For
an
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instant, one of my friends got married and he take
a lone
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 for that and after
that
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 he could not pay the
money
 for the bank.If he a little
money
 for that he can arrange that lover In conclusion, there are
lot
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 of benefits and drawbacks
from
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 getting
bigger
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 wedding and In my point
of
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view
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 It depends on the state of the
people
. Rich
people
 can do that and others can not,
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