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You work for an international company. You want to attend special family celebration during working hours. You need to take time off work for this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - Give details of family celebration - Tell your manager how much time time off work you need - Suggest how work can be done while you attend the celebration

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Dear
Mr.
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 Tang, I write
letter
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a letter
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 to check with you to please give me
holiday
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a holiday
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 from work for two
day
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 as my daughter is graduate in school. My daughter study in Vancouver and we going
for
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 her graduate celebration there. I am asking for Thursday and Friday off my duty so I come back to work on Monday morning.
This
 my eldest daughter and
she
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first
 in
family
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the family
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 to finish university so we want to make
small
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 party for her and her friend and my other family members in the Vancouver. She
finish
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 with
very
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 good score and we want to celebrate. I can teach any staff to do my work, so please tell me when to do the training for my job for another person. I can finish doing the teaching in 2
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 time, so no problem. Yours sincerely, PF Chang
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