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Some people are happy to spend their whole lives in the same area. Other people prefer to live in many different areas. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People
 hold different views about living, some
people
 prefer to spend their entire life at
one
place
, but others prefer to transfer to different
places
. In my opinion, I partially agree as I believe that an individual should explore different
places
, but eventually needs to settle down in
some
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place
 to start a family. On the
one
 hand, some
people
 may have
emotional
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an emotional
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 attachment towards their hometown or the
place
 where they are living
since
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 many years.
This
 is mainly because an individual may feel content and relaxed.
For instance
, an individual living in
one
place
, since birth, may have
its
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childhood friends living in the same city,
one
’s school and other beautiful memories may make the
place
 more memorable to live in;
therefore
, it will be difficult to leave the
place
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 are curious about different
places
;
hence
, they move out from
one
 city to another. The main reason is that each
place
 has its own uniqueness and
people
 after knowing about
such
places
 may feel they want to explore it by living there.
For example
, recently an article was published in a Travel magazine about a teenager who wanted to explore different
places
, in India, and has lived in five different cities.
However
, it is not easy for a family person to switch areas, as it may negatively impact their children. It would not only harm their studies but
also
 it will consume time to adjust to a new
place
. In conclusion, I believe that
people
 should explore different
places
,
nevertheless
, it would be difficult to migrate with a family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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