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Band 3.5

Some people are happy to spend their whole lives in the same area. Other people prefer to live in many different areas. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #lives #area #areas
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Some
people
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very
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are very
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 happy and
spending
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spend
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 all life in the same area but some
people
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 move and go
another
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to another
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place
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. I think it good for
people
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 to go to many
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place
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places
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 and check if they like
or
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it or
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 not and
then
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 decide to
living
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live
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 there with family. Living in
same
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the same
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city
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 has many
advantage
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advantages
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 and so many
people
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 like living in
same
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the same
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 area. It is very easy to reach the mother home for
a girls
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girls
a girl
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 if marry
boy
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the boy
a boy
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 in
same
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the same
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 town.
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, I live in Delhi and my
mother
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mother's
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 house is 10
minute
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minutes
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 from my
husband
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husband's
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 house. So very easy for me to ask my mother help for
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to bring
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bring
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bringing
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 up my children. So, I like
live
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living
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 in Delhi because my family live there. On
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the other
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other
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another
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 side, it is
also
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 good to go
many
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to many
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 different
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place
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places
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 to see which is
good
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a good
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place
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 for
future
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the future
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.
For
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example
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,example
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 my husband
work
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works
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 in many
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city
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cities
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 before coming to Canada and I bring my children
for
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to
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 high school here. We living here for 2 years and like
this
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place
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also
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. Canada
better
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is better
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 for the
children
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children's
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 education so
future
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the future
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 is more good here than my
city
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, Delhi. In total, both
option
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options
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 to living in
same
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the same
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place
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 since
child
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a child
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 or
move
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moving
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 to
other
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another
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place
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 is both good but
people
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 must check what is best for
future
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the future
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 of
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family-like
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their family
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family
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families
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 like job, education and life before
finalize
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finalizing
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 the final
city
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