Some people think parents should be forced to attend childcare course to learn how to take care of their children. Do you agree?
It is often argued that childcare
course
should be made mandatory for Fix the agreement mistake
courses
parents
to learn how to look after their children. I agree with the notion, I think it is very important, specially
with the rise of Replace the word
especially
nuclear
family, parenting course will help with both mental and physical growth of a Add an article
the nuclear
a nuclear
child
.
Firstly
, with the more number of nuclear families, people lack a expert advice
, that they use to get from Remove the article
expert advice
a piece of expert advice
a bit of expert advice
grand
Correct your spelling
grandparents
parents
in earlier times. It is very important for a child
to have right
diet, and I believe Add an article
the right
parents
can take help from these courses
to learn what is right
food according to Correct article usage
the right
child's
age. Correct article usage
the child's
For example
, one of my cousin
had a hard time feeding her Change to a plural noun
cousins
child
, her child
always had difficulties with food digestion. Upon seeing a doctor, they figured out that the food she was giving to her child
was not appropriate according to her age. Hence
, I think parenting courses
will help parents
, to give right
diet to their Correct article usage
the right
child
and help with a
better physical growth of their Correct article usage
the
child
.
Secondly
, mental growth is also
very important for a child
. All the children have different behavior
and I think childcare Change the spelling
behaviour
courses
will help parents
to understand their mental state better. It will be easier for parents
to understand their behavior
, guide and correct them. Change the spelling
behaviour
For instance
, according to one survey done by an organisation, it was shown that their
was Replace the word
there
significant
change Correct article usage
a significant
is
Correct your spelling
in
child
's behavior
after their Change the spelling
behaviour
parents
took child
care course, Kids were more disciplined and well behaved.
To conclude, I strongly Correct article usage
a child
believes
that parenting Change the verb form
believe
courses
will help parents
a heap to raise and understand their children better.Submitted by Allazhar on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite