Some people think parents should be forced to attend childcare course to learn how to take care of their children. Do you agree?

It is often argued that childcare
course
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courses
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should be made mandatory for
parents
to learn how to look after their children. I agree with the notion, I think it is very important,
specially
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with the rise of
nuclear
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the nuclear
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family, parenting course will help with both mental and physical growth of a
child
.
Firstly
, with the more number of nuclear families, people lack
a expert advice
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, that they use to get from
grand
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parents
in earlier times. It is very important for a
child
to have
right
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diet, and I believe
parents
can take help from these
courses
to learn what is
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food according to
child's
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age.
For example
, one of my
cousin
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had a hard time feeding her
child
, her
child
always had difficulties with food digestion. Upon seeing a doctor, they figured out that the food she was giving to her
child
was not appropriate according to her age.
Hence
, I think parenting
courses
will help
parents
, to give
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diet to their
child
and help with
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better physical growth of their
child
.
Secondly
, mental growth is
also
very important for a
child
. All the children have different
behavior
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and I think childcare
courses
will help
parents
to understand their mental state better. It will be easier for
parents
to understand their
behavior
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, guide and correct them.
For instance
, according to one survey done by an organisation, it was shown that
their
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was
significant
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change
is
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child
's
behavior
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after their
parents
took
child
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care course, Kids were more disciplined and well behaved. To conclude, I strongly
believes
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that parenting
courses
will help
parents
a heap to raise and understand their children better.
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