People should look after their health because this is a duty to the society not just a personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some think that
people
should take care of their health
as it is not only a duty to the community but also
a personal benefits
. As far as I Correct the article-noun agreement
benefit
concerned
, I totally agree with their idea. In Add a missing verb
am concerned
this
essay, I will point out some of my idea and reasons for my agreement.
First
of all,a
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health
is the most important thing that everyone should take care of. It is undeniable fact that a healthy person is a joyful person. In addition
, healthy people
make the
society better. Correct article usage
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For example
, an unhealthy person may release the virus and bacteria to the enviorment
through coughing.
On the Correct your spelling
environment
one's
hand, Change noun form
one
the
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health
can bring a lot of personal's advantages. The first
merit that can be brought is real happiness. This
is because healthy people
can do everything that make
them happy. They can work harder and make more money rather than unhealthy Change the verb form
makes
people
. Unhealthy people
could not happy as much as normal people
. Especially people
who suffer serious
diseases are more likely to feel depressed and stressed . They have to take a lot of medicine and avoid their favourite foods. Change preposition
from serious
Nevertheless
, healthy people
can eat every food they want without worrying Change preposition
about healthy
healthy
problems. Replace the word
health
Besides
, people
who always take care of their health
looks very young and active. What is more, being healthy can have better opportunies
in education and Correct your spelling
opportunities
works
since they can put more Fix the agreement mistake
work
efforts
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effort
to
get Change preposition
into
an
achievement. There is no doubt that being unhealthy may delay Change the word
their
people
's dreams.
Being healty
is a natural gift from Correct your spelling
healthy
the
god. Several steps must be done to have a healthy lifestyle Correct article usage
apply
such
as have
enough sleep time, Wrong verb form
having
avoid
having junk foods and Wrong verb form
avoiding
eat
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eating
the
nutritious meals. Most importantly, doing exercise Correct article usage
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everyday
because exercise can improve stamina.
To sum up, Replace the word
every day
the
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health
is the key to every success and it can make the world more peaceful, fresh and happy.Submitted by tthoon21 on
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