Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children that are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Different
people
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have different views about a sense of
competition
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in
children
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. There is a heated
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debate
that has sparked all over the world. Some believe that the elder should encourage
children
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concerned with the thinking style of
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tournament
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the tournament
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while the others think
co-operation
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should be taught compared to
competition
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to be more mature and effective adults. In
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essay, the
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discussion
of both ideas and my
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perspective
will be mentioned.
First
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and foremost,
competition
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can make the youth hardworking. There is no doubt that everyone
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to be the winner
hence
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, they become more
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.
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, by participating in the
competition
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, a lot of great experiences and motivation can be got.
For example
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, a male student who take part in the
tournament
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of essays,
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will automatically get the writing and research skills. What is more, the experience of the
competition
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can give many benefits for the students.
Children
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can prepare
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for their
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their
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the
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mistakes that they did in the
tournament
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and become
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perfect youth.
On the other hand
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,
co-operation
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is
also
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a good opinion when it comes to useful
people
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. It is undeniable fact that
co-operation
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is very essential in our daily life.
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is because it can improve our communication and
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teamwork
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team work
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teamwork
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skills.
Moreover
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, it helps
people
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to complete their tasks more quickly.
Besides
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, It
give
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required skills
such
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as having respect other's opinion to the
children
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to be effective adults.
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, by doing co-operate, different ideas from the members of the team will be got.
Last
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but not least, the
children
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can have
a
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better communication with
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colleagues
and meet new friends. As far as I am concerned, both of them are good ideas but I prefer
co-operation
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rather than
competition
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.
This
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is because
competition
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may make the
children
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more greedy and
attacker
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attackers
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. When
people
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eager
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are eager
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to win very extremely, they tend to do unusual things
such
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as
physicial
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physical
violence to their opponents. Unlike the
tournament
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,
co-operation
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teach
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teaches
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the teenagers how to struggle
a
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with a
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hard situation or how to solve the problems together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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