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: It is a good idea for teenagers to have jobs while they are still students. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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There has been a controversial argument about whether or not high
school
 students should
work
 simultaneously with studying. Personally, I partially agree with
this
 view because it is a two-sided sword. On the one hand, I believe that having a
job
 as a student would negatively affect their performance at
school
. They have to allocate their time to
work
instead
 of study which may decrease their grades.
For example
, when they have an exam, they need to study a lot but if they have a
job
, they will not have enough time to prepare.
This
 could
also
 lead them to leave the
school
.
In addition
, working is likely to distract them and tiredness in consequence. On top of that, they may be exploited by their manager and colleagues because they are too young to be aware of their rights as an employee.
On the other hand
, having a good part-time
job
my
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may
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 benefit them more than the above-mentioned drawbacks.
Firstly
, they gain valuable experiences by working with adults.
In other words
, they might learn proper behaviour in a workplace to make good connections which would be helpful in the future.
Secondly
,
there
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 are likely to learn practical skills to become a professional, especially if they
work
 in the field of construction.
Finally
, having
work
 experience on their CV might impress their prospective employer.
For instance
, if they have
work
 experience in programming, they will be more suitable and have more chances to get a
job
 in a big company. In conclusion,
although
 working during high
school
 would be hard and have some negative impacts, in my opinion, the potential benefits are worth trying.
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