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What do you think of the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

#process #sugar #cane
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making
sugar
 from
sugar
 cane. “How
Sugar
 Is Produced From
Sugar
 Cane” is the name of the diagram below illustrating the process of manufacturing
this
 popular product. As can be seen,
this
 procedure has seven steps from harvesting
sugar
 canes to centrifuging syrup. Harvesting
that is
 the
second
 step could be done either by hand or machine after 12- 18 months of growing of
sugar
 cans. In the
third
 step, cans would be crushed to produce a white juice.
Then
, with a limestone filter, the juice will be purified. After that, in an evaporator on heat, the juice becomes syrup. The two
last
 steps belong to centrifuging the syrup and drying and cooling
sugar
 crystals processes. It is not a secret that human being is interested in brand new items and always has been seeking modernity and advancement to provide a better answer to their requirements and desires. Even if you take a look at a fundamentalist group, the Taliban
for instance
, you can realize that they are enthusiastic to attain new guns and other advanced military weapons.
Therefore
 being new is a claim based on people's ambitions. Having a more accurate look at
this
 claim will reveal its drawbacks. After being motivated by a misleading advertisement, some customers will be tempted to purchase the so-called new item.
However
, soon they will find that there are no meaningful differences between purchased goods and the previous ones.
This
 not only would cause a sense of frustration, but
also
 could bring disappointment to consumers.
Moreover
, when the vast majority of the population has shared experiences in
this
 way, it might cause mental health disorders in society. To sum up, false ads that are not based on telling the truth, in my opinion, are a kind of misuse of human demands and have more negative consequences. Their only positive aspect might be raising companies’ profit.
Therefore
, because of their disadvantages, I cannot consider them as a positive development in marketing or any other field.
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