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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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Increasing the quality of living most likely provides more improvements in the
cities
 of a country compared to rural areas.
This
 essay will outline some possible reasons
as well as
 suggest some solutions to mitigate the issue. One of the reasons that may cause
this
 problem is population.
While
 today,
cities
 are the most populated areas of any country, governments are faced with more challenges in these districts.
Therefore
, many facilities and standards planned or built are based on the urban rather than the countryside.
For example
, urban traffic is a problem that leads to
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 roads with higher standards, an aspect that rural zones might never encounter. The economy is
also
 another reason for more advantages in urban.
Due to
 the industries and other businesses in these regions, the economy flows more
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, resulting in significant attention of authorities to make improvements toward exploiting the potential of
cities
, and
Consequently
, fewer benefits for rural.
However
, there are several approaches to resolve
this
 issue.
To begin
 with, governments should persuade their citizens to live in the countryside by making more facilities and motivation plans,
in other words
, having a relatively equal population in all regions of the country.
As a result
, authorities can easily make developments with no conflict in other areas.
Finally
, having sufficient income for rustic residents can remarkably help balance the living quality for everyone.
This
 can be provided with more job opportunities in the suburbs. A good example in real life is Japan which offers more salaries and better jobs in unpopulated
cities
. In conclusion, as the primary reasons mentioned,
although
 many of the rises
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 standards affect the
cities
,
this
 can be easily solved by governmental actions in short and
long term
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 schemes.
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Task Response: Ensure that all aspects of the given prompt are fully addressed in the essay. Provide more specific examples related to the impact of standard of living on both cities and rural areas.
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