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Government should spend on railways than roads Do what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people think that there should be more government funding for railways than roads.
This
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 essay will show that
this
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 assumption is right enumerating the benefits from a railway
system
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 over a road
system
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.
Firstly
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,
trains
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 are much safer than cars and
trucks
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. Most fatal car accidents occur in routes, so reducing the number of cars in them will greatly reduce the deaths in car crashes. It is essential for a country to move goods and people and the government has a role in that, but protecting their citizens' lives always comes
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.
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,
trains
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 are much better for the environment. They emit less carbon dioxide per Kg of load, making them much more efficient.
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, electric
trains
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 powered by renewable sources are completely carbon-free.
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, there are others advantages to the environment,
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,
trains
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 produce much less waste than other vehicles
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 as
trucks
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.
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, a railway
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 is more beneficial to the economy.
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,
trains
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 allow moving cargo faster and cheaper than
trucks
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 which reduces the prices of consumer goods making the economy of the country more competitive.
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, it is easier to control the goods that are being transported by train than in
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.
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 allows the government to reduce
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 illegal substances.
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, it is possible to x-ray all the cargo, something
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 not possible with
trucks
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. To sum up, investing in a railway
system
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 is better because it is safer, environmentally friendly, better for the economy and helps to reduce the transportation of illegal substances.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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