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Government should spend on railways than roads Do what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people think that there should be more government funding for railways than roads.
This
 essay will show that
this
 assumption is right enumerating the benefits from a railway
system
 over a road
system
.
Firstly
,
trains
 are much safer than cars and
trucks
. Most fatal car accidents occur in routes, so reducing the number of cars in them will greatly reduce the deaths in car crashes. It is essential for a country to move goods and people and the government has a role in that, but protecting their citizens' lives always comes
first
.
Secondly
,
trains
 are much better for the environment. They emit less carbon dioxide per Kg of load, making them much more efficient.
In addition
, electric
trains
 powered by renewable sources are completely carbon-free.
However
, there are others advantages to the environment,
for example
,
trains
 produce much less waste than other vehicles
such
 as
trucks
.
Thirdly
, a railway
system
 is more beneficial to the economy.
For instance
,
trains
 allow moving cargo faster and cheaper than
trucks
 which reduces the prices of consumer goods making the economy of the country more competitive.
Lastly
, it is easier to control the goods that are being transported by train than in
trucks
.
This
 allows the government to reduce
the deal of
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 illegal substances.
For example
, it is possible to x-ray all the cargo, something
that is
 not possible with
trucks
. To sum up, investing in a railway
system
 is better because it is safer, environmentally friendly, better for the economy and helps to reduce the transportation of illegal substances.
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