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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive development or negative development?

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Nowadays many companies use marketing to try to sell their
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 like new ones for different reasons either with positive or negative impacts on the
people
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. In my opinion, I believe
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 type of announcement could have a negative impact.
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, It can be seen a lot of
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 want to keep updated with cutting edge technology with a negative impact on society.
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, every year Apple in their publicity
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 that the new iPhone have new features and
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 encourages society to have new spending as a priority ,especially on youths.
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, the population increase the desire for material things.
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, other
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 think that could benefit the economy.
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, there are those who feel that selling
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 like new are a deception.
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, brands like Coca-Cola change the appearance of their
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 but the
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 always are the same.
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,
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 feel tired of
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 type of company because they
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 in different types of advertisement the same, with a negative impact on the mind of
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 who watch that.
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 there are some who think that business is better when is different and creative selling
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 like new than if they
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 the same advertisement. In conclusion, marketing could influence in different ways the
people
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 who watch that, either negatively or positively. I agree with those who believe when brands
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products
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 like new have a negative effect on society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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