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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children that are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. discuss both views and give your own opinion

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There is a heated debate that has sparked all over the world. Some believe that it is important to boost young children a mindset of the tournament while it is considered that
co-operation
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 is more suitable to be taught compared to the
competition
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 because they think it would be a big help to be effective adults. In
this
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 essay, a discussion of both ideas and my opinion will be mentioned.
To begin
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 with, participating in a
competition
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 is a good thing to do regardless of winning.
People
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 can get a lot of benefits from a game
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 as a great experience, motivation and friends. What
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 more, games make the youth more active, fresh and hardworking
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In addition
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, while preparing for the
competition
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, uncountable knowledge about the title or topic can be got.
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, participating in the historical essay match,
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wisdom of the history
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 as what was happening in the respective country and how did elder
people
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 overcame can be noticed.
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, most
people
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 tend to win the final resulting selfish and making bad things to opponents.
On the other hand
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,
co-operation
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 is
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 an important skill that every young
people
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 should practise since they were young. There is no doubt that
co-operation
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 can improve teamwork skills, communicating skills and other required skills in daily life.
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, at least two
people
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 have to work together and share their ideas to co-operate.
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, teenagers are more likely to respect other
people
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's views and they become more patient. Most importantly, if the children have the habit of
co-operation
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, they have more chances of getting more opportunities in every field. To sum up, I more prefer
co-operation
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 rather than
competition
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.
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 their targets are the same which is winning or finishing the task perfectly,
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 may bring negative thinking and physical violence.
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, I believe that the advantages of
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 outweigh the merits of
competition
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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