Governments spend large amounts of money on art that not all people enjoy. This money could be better spent on things that benefit the majority of the population. Do you agree?

The

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art

has always been viewed as an

inseperatable

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inseparable

part of

the

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human's

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life.

Thus

, the

government

is playing an increasingly important role in investing for its

expantion

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expansion

.

This

investment is being

critisized

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criticized

by experts and it is widely accepted that there are a great number of more concerning issues that can be solved by

this

money.

However

, I believe that

art

is a pivotal subject in our lives

which

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requires considerable attention. The following essay will overlook two rationals behind my belief.

Firstly

, mankind not only loves

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beauty but

also

benefits from it.

For example

,

art

is one of the integral treatment methods

of

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for

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specific diseases,like depression.

In addition

, the

prevalance

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prevalence

of

this

condition has been increasing over

last

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decade.

Consequently

, if the

government

spends money on increasing the access of people to

this

topic, public health will increase which is the

first

priority of governments.

Moreover

, the

government

is expected to provide an appropriate situation for all of the society

members

.

Although

the number of

members

who are enjoying arts might not be considerable, they are vital parts of each community that have brought a lot of joy

in

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others

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others'

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lives.

For instance

, the traditional singers might not be as many as they use to be but listening to traditional songs can remind a lot of good memories which might be forgotten without

the

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governmental

supports

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. These artists are valuable society

members

,

hence

they deserve

this

investment. To sum up,

art

is a pivotal topic that needs the attention of the

government

;

however

,

this

budget can be spent on other basic needs. I believe that the mental beneficial effects of

art

and the responsibility of the

government

toward all of

society

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members

are two rationales that make

art

enough valuable to be taken into account.