Some people think that success is mainly measured by how much money a person has. To what extent do you agree?

Success
has been viewed as a desirable goal of human life which
people
are trying hard throughout the best years of their lifelong to achieve
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. It is widely accepted that one of
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integral
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of being successful is being wealthy.
However
, I am completely in disagreement with the above-said view. The following essay will overlook two important reasons that explain why
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money
can not bring
success
.
Firstly
, happiness is the fundamental
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of
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feeling
success
that usually be achieved by spending
time
on
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enjoying our lives.
For example
, the more we spend
time
on our hobbies the more we are satisfied and happy.
In contrast
, earning
money
needs working hard and spending the majority of our days even weekends pursuing our careers and goals which is incompatible with enjoying our lives.
Consequently
, the rich
people
who work most of their lives can not be assumed successful
people
unless they have
time
for enjoying life.
Moreover
, successful folks are those who are famous in their careers which does not necessarily
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the ones who are earning more.
For instance
, a famous carpenter in a small town can
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more successful than a regular doctor in a big city who is earning
alot
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a lot
.
Although
most
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popular
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people
might earn enough due to the great number of customers, there are many
people
who
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not been increasing their customers' fees and
subsequently
are not wealthy despite
of
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being famous. It means that fame makes it possible to be successful without being rich. To sum up, having enough
money
does not guarantee
the
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success
. I believe that being happy and famous are playing
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significant role in achieving
this
goal since the
time
spent on earning
money
prevents the former and the
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one is not always the consequence of being rich.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • success
  • financial wealth
  • measurement
  • achievements
  • entrepreneurs
  • personal fulfillment
  • philanthropy
  • accomplishments
  • well-being
  • material possessions
  • status symbol
  • indicators
  • self-actualization
  • monetary gains
  • non-materialistic
  • social impact
  • status
  • fulfillment
  • aspiration
  • well-off
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