Some people think that success is mainly measured by how much money a person has. To what extent do you agree?
Success
has been viewed as a desirable goal of human life which people
are trying hard throughout the best years of their lifelong to achieve it
. It is widely accepted that one of Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
integral Change the article
an
part
of being successful is being wealthy. Change to a plural noun
parts
However
, I am completely in disagreement with the above-said view. The following essay will overlook two important reasons that explain why the
Correct article usage
apply
money
can not bring success
.
Firstly
, happiness is the fundamental pilar
of Correct your spelling
pillar
feelling
Correct your spelling
feeling
success
that usually be achieved by spending time
on
enjoying our lives. Change preposition
apply
For example
, the more we spend time
on our hobbies the more we are satisfied and happy. In contrast
, earning money
needs working hard and spending the majority of our days even weekends pursuing our careers and goals which is incompatible with enjoying our lives. Consequently
, the rich people
who work most of their lives can not be assumed successful people
unless they have time
for enjoying life.
Moreover
, successful folks are those who are famous in their careers which does not necessarily means
the ones who are earning more. Change the verb form
mean
For instance
, a famous carpenter in a small town can feels
more successful than a regular doctor in a big city who is earning Change the verb form
feel
alot
. Correct your spelling
a lot
Although
most of
Change preposition
apply
popular
Add an article
the popular
people
might earn enough due to the great number of customers, there are many people
who has
not been increasing their customers' fees and Change the verb form
have
subsequently
are not wealthy despite of
being famous. It means that fame makes it possible to be successful without being rich.
To sum up, having enough Remove the preposition
apply
money
does not guarantee the
Correct article usage
apply
success
. I believe that being happy and famous are playing more
significant role in achieving Add an article
a more
this
goal since the time
spent on earning money
prevents the former and the latters
one is not always the consequence of being rich.Correct your spelling
latter
letters
latter's
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