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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter • describe the problem • say how long it has been a problem • explain what action you want the neighbour to take Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

#minutes #neighbour #action #addresses
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Dear Mr Smith The reason I am writing to you is to inform you of my concerns about your dog walking on my territory.
To begin
 with, I know that you are so kind and pleasant person, but I cannot put up with your dog going to my backyard. The main problem is that I
also
 recently got a cat and now they cannot get
along with
 each other.
Therefore
, your pet is constantly barking at mine. And because of
this
 noise, my kids are not able to sleep well.
Secondly
, you may not pay attention to it,
however
, it has been going on for over 2 months and now it is time to end it.
Additionally
, I have nothing about your pet or you, my kid loves spending time with your Labrador.
To sum up
, I would like to talk with you and solve
this
 problem. I want to make a solution which suits everyone. Maybe we should make a schedule. You can come to me and I will bake some cookies for us. Text me as soon as possible. I look forward to your reply Kseniia
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Task Achievement
Make sure to explicitly state the actions you'd like your neighbour to take. While suggesting making a schedule is a great start, being more specific about the nature of the solution could strengthen your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider connecting your ideas more fluidly between paragraphs. Transitional phrases can help guide the reader through your letter seamlessly.
Task Achievement
Your letter effectively describes the problem and its duration, adhering well to the task's requirements.
Task Achievement
The friendly tone and the proposal of a peaceful meeting over cookies wonderfully reflects a kind and constructive approach towards resolving the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your concluding statement warmly invites a reply, effectively closing your letter on a positive note.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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