People should look after their health because this is a duty to the society not just a personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that people should value their body in terms of
health
because it is a responsibility to the nation not just for self intentions.
Health
care
is important to focus on each individual for which it will not
cause
any trouble to society.
This
essay agrees that each individual should take
care
of their well-being because it may
cause
complications and may lead to the
the
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pandemic as well as
a family obstacles
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a family obstacle
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in terms of
money
.
Health
care
is one of the major
complication
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of our government,
thus
resulting
to
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serious
headache
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. Even though the ministry is entitled to look for
solution
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in the society's
health
care
it is still the person's responsibility to take
care
his
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well-being because there
are
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various
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nation which has small
far flung
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places that cannot
be reach
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by the
health-
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healthcare
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care
workers.
Therefore
, leading to
adversed
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adverse
ramifications if not properly
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.
For instance
, flu fever
that
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can be cured by self-awareness regarding flu season.
In addition
, the family members can start an obstacle for
money
.
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, my sister had dengue fever, my parents have no idea where to get the
money
for medication.
Therefore
, if the individual has
an
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ability to protect healthfulness, it may not
cause
trouble. The person
also
should have
an
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initiative to protect his stamina causing to eliminate the minimal disease. In conclusion, I strongly agree that each individual should protect
thei
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their
the
them
well-being because it may
cause
negative situations and
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and may lead to family problems about
money
savings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • duty
  • well-being
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • productive
  • economy
  • example
  • empower
  • informed choices
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