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Some companies require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#companies #employees #uniform
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 debate whether which part of development
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the costume designed by a firm is essential. In
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existing benefits and
possibly
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 negative results that are able to obtain from a restricted uniform. Similar appearance might be a key factor that led pros to various branches.
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, in circumstance of providing industry's cloths can be the one of staff's profit that they should not consider searching and deciding which is one suitable enough for daily work.
Consequently
, if there is
deal
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 between employees and clients, the number one step of accomplishment would not disregard
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the
first
 impression, formal cloth and attractive
presentation
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 seem to be reasonable
that is
important
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 conviction for business.
Furthermore
, even someone who has huge power in society or come from
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 family must follow the rule to wear the same costume that perhaps illustrates equality of company.
On the other hand
, dependent uniform tends to be worse ways to
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seriousness
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 of people who receive
salary
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 from employment. The example can be
firstly
 seen in stress among artists who
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 not enough space and freedom for them to frequently practice their uncountable creativities.
Secondly
, neither firm's suits are given, or it is own duty of hired workers to afford, these situations raise
unnecessary
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 cost to both sides. Overall, unity of equal appearance properly is the prime
solutions
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 of specific successes and likely affect cons
concequences
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consequences
 for employment and their people.
Therefore
,
this
 should be the essential subject that
company
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 must find the individually proper remedy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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