Every year, many people move to large cities to live and work. This is one of the biggest problems in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
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immigration to bigger
cities
to pursue a better life is worldwide. For years,
this
phenomenon had been viewed as a positive act that could bring a great number of young workers to the
cities
, but recently people are taking a fresh look at it. It is argued that moving to bigger
cities
can cause concerning problems for the world. I am completely in agreement with the above-said view. The following essay will overlook two rationales that support my idea.
Firstly
, the growing
population
of big
cities
is becoming out of control and the provided facilities are not sufficient to serve
this
population
.
For example
, the number of available houses
are
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not enough to respond
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inquiry.
Consequently
, a great number of small flats with
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lower quality are being constructed to
accomodate
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accommodate
them in a short period.
In addition
, the social facilities of those neighbourhoods were designed for little
population
and changing those facilities to respond
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new
population
puts
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great pressure on the government which means financial
burdan
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burden
not only for the government but
also
for the
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taxpayers
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tax payers
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taxpayers
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.
Moreover
, the small
towns
and the occupations that were established in those areas are
demolishing
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.
For instance
,
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agriculture is usually the main career in small
towns
which has faced
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lack of human resources due to
this
immigration.
Less
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farmers mean less harvest and
subsequently
the danger of the families'
bankrupcy
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bankruptcy
.
Although
living in the bigger
cities
might be preferable to staying in the small
towns
due to the
existance
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existence
of more potential opportunities, it suffers from the disadvantages that threaten the
villages
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existence and their settlers.
Thus
, the decrease
of
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their
productions
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might even cause a worldwide famine. To sum up,
pursueing
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pursuing
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opportunities in the larger urban areas and leaving the small regions are not
necesserily
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necessarily
means a better life. I believe that the lack of sufficient social services and the possibility of
destruction
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of small businesses in
towns
negate the positive consequence of
this
phenomenon.
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