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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificial intelligence robots. What is your opinion?

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 of technology grows, many useful products have been invented. One of the greatest inventions is the artificial intelligence robot. They freed our
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 hands. Additional, they
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 have higher productivity than human beings.
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, artificially robots cannot replace occupations that required human interaction, knowledge, engagement and etc. In
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 in a dangerous environment, avoid accidents,
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 a longer span and etc.
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, robotic automation is the ideal solution because they can
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 automatically without getting illness and injuries.
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, breaks are not necessary for them. They can
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 twenty- four hours a day and seven days a week without any rest. All they need is electricity to supply them.
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 have many flaws,
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 as lack of emotion, lack of creativity and etc.
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 as a psychologist.
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 job required empathy in order to help the clients out of
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 for the programmed or given instruction. It will not think out of the box like
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 and it might give unexpected output. In conclusion, there are still some jobs
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 replace by A.I. robots. They need improvement on interaction, emotion and creativity. As long as these weaknesses
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 improved,
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society.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Automation
  • Workplace automation
  • Human intuition
  • Job displacement
  • Collaborative robots (Cobots)
  • Skill adaptation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Economic implications
  • Fully automated workforce
  • Human-machine collaboration
  • Technological advancements
  • Creative industries
  • Empathy
  • Socio-economic impact
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