/ 1 point WRITING TASK 2 Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

It is widely known that parenting is hard. Some
parents
spoil their
children
with anything they asked to buy even allow them
free
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to do anything they want. Is
this
good or bad parenting? Is there any negative impact caused by doing that
kind
of parenting? A
couple
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things can
justified
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justify
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that
kind
of parenting.
First
, It can make
children
have some sort of controlled
environtment
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environment
. Buying things makes
parents
know what
kind
of interest
that
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apply
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spark the
children
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children's
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intuition.
Second
, It may introduce
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kids
that
parents
are trustworthy
thus
making
a
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apply
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good communication.
On the other hand
, It could be
disaster
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in the future.
Children
will become
dependant
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as they used to get things without
hardwork
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hard work
. Doing whatever they want will make them feel powerful as no one would correct them. It will be hard for working together with others. Personally, I would agree that
Parents
that grant anything their
children
ask or do whatever they want is
bad
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a bad
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kind
of parenting.
Instead
, I think that
Parents
should maintain a good balance between being strict or being generous. Too hard and the
kids
will tend to
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feel
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fell
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feel
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stressed or anxious.
Then
again, too soft and the
kids
will be badly spoiled.
Parents
should have their own style to teach the
kids
with good concern for their future
endeavour
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.
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